Monday 13 February 2012

Persuasive Paragraph

Getting a bumper car is way cooler than finishing medical school. First of all, when you finish medical school, you're already an adult and ready for a real job. However, with a bumper car of your very own, you are a kid at heart forever. Additionally, when you get your medical degree and become a doctor with a healthy paycheck, you will probably drive around in your Mustang or Ferrari, which are already so old. Think about how cool you would look driving up to your job at the ice cream parlor in your bumper car. Along with that, whenever you get into an accident, you wouldn't care because there would be no crash, just a bump. No broken windows, no dented doors. It would be fun to get in an accident. Having a bumper is way cooler than finishing medical school.

2 comments:

  1. Your points were very persuasive, and to me you won that aurgument. I especially enjoyed your point about how mustangs and ferrari's are so old. Very well done Jordan! :)

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  2. You are very persuasive, you may very well have convinced me. Getting a bumper car is really cool, but so is finishing medical school. Although you do know that bumper cars have to be attached to a floor and/or ceiling to receive electricity to move? Therefore you cannot drive it on roads. I think you have done a very good job on this persuasive paragraph.

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